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9/30 Where Revision

posted Sep 30, 2015, 8:07 AM by   [ updated Oct 4, 2015, 1:35 PM ]

After writing and revising your poem in your own document, let's share one revision together.    Work Space

Revision:  ARMS -- Work on "Add" and "Move"

Add detail, description, figurative language to elaborate your ideas for your audience [word choice, voice]
Remove general, repetitive, unnecessary information [ideas, word choice]
Move around the phrases and sentences into a more logical and clear order [organization].
Substitute boring, general words with action and imagery [sights/ sounds].

Elaboration Strategies   More information on Elaboration Strategies

Detail:  5WsH  Who What When Where Why How

Description: Sights, Sounds

author strategies to create the exact picture you want in your readers mind.